Script Feedback - Round 1

We just got our first round of script feedback from Tim, a dear friend who has just hopped onto the project.  With detailed notes from Tim, we sat down together over the internet to discuss the feedback.  Jorge was in LA, Jason and Stephen were in Salt Lake City and I was (and still am) in the good ol' AZ. 

We discussed characters, hooks and the purpose of a script... and we came across the idea that the script you initially write and the one you shoot from can be vastly different.  The script you use to sell you concept to a possible investor can also be unique in its own right.  

AOI - On Scripts for Invest  by  m5coff

Enjoy!